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lagilman*sigh* I just hit a whopper of a SftSoP in the line edit. One of the major characters knows something -- something that's very important to the storyline. His job requires him to share his fact. He doesn't.
Okay, there are ways of handling that. He's not sure it's a valid fact (distrusts the source). He is obsessed with a theory that this evidence contradicts. He is trying to keep it from being known, in order to set a trap. Any of those would work -- but the author doesn't do any of those things. Instead, we simply see him thinking 'fact A doesn't fit with the theory.' The opportunity to establish character motivation and plot complexity bypassed, and instead we have a weakness in the book.
*peels post-it off pad, tags it onto page in question, moves on*
Okay, there are ways of handling that. He's not sure it's a valid fact (distrusts the source). He is obsessed with a theory that this evidence contradicts. He is trying to keep it from being known, in order to set a trap. Any of those would work -- but the author doesn't do any of those things. Instead, we simply see him thinking 'fact A doesn't fit with the theory.' The opportunity to establish character motivation and plot complexity bypassed, and instead we have a weakness in the book.
*peels post-it off pad, tags it onto page in question, moves on*
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Date: 2006-08-14 01:03 am (UTC)(P.S. Don't know if you saw this: http://tru2myart.livejournal.com/20679.html but I wanted to make sure you knew how much you made my daughters day. She is deep into the first book of the Grail Trilogy and she loves it and she has told all of her friends about you and what a sweet lady you are. First time I've seen my 14 year old dance and bop around like that. :) Thank you so much. )
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Date: 2006-08-14 12:56 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-08-15 12:48 pm (UTC):runs off to check:
-- R.
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Date: 2006-08-15 01:39 pm (UTC)