A Poetic Amusement....

[lagilman]

Over on his LJ, jaylake talks (via jimvanpelt) about recasting prose as poetry, to look at your current work from another perspective. I gave it a try, and was amused at how the current short story turned out....


Unlike the sax,
the trombone
blasts its way onto the scene,
sliding like a triumphant runner
into third base,
giving the rest of the band a neener-neener
as it brushes itself off
and accepts
the accolades of the crowd.
You needed a certain kind of arrogance
to pick up a trombone,
and you needed even more
to keep playing
until you got the hang of it.




Yeah. Can anyone guess what school of poetry I gravitate toward?

And how about you? What does your prose look like, recast?

Comments

[jimvanpelt.livejournal.com]

Hi, Laura Ann. I like this snippet. Nice comparison! Do you mind if I quote it and then show how I would revise it as a prose paragraph?

[lagilman]

Quote away, so long as you're not offended if I raise an eyebrow at how you revise vs how I'm actually writing the story... *g*

(dead writers are so much easier to deconstruct, aren't they? Much less mouthy....)

[http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/]

I like the slipperiness of that. Very playful.